Very interesting ideas, but I have one constructive (I hope) criticism: It's difficult to read, especially those passages with an image background (are those sigils?). May I suggest you put those images on the side of the pages, so the reading may flow a little easier? Also, the pure black you used for some backgrounds make the contrast too hard, so, in those pages I suggest you find a more pleasing dark tone or increase font size and kerning. And add a little more space between paragraphs/sections of the text (may increase the number of pages). That should help your text and overall printing quality. And last but not least, this is good effort, well thought and well written, and I commend it with all my heart. I hope to see even better things from you. Thank you for this effort.
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Very interesting ideas, but I have one constructive (I hope) criticism: It's difficult to read, especially those passages with an image background (are those sigils?). May I suggest you put those images on the side of the pages, so the reading may flow a little easier? Also, the pure black you used for some backgrounds make the contrast too hard, so, in those pages I suggest you find a more pleasing dark tone or increase font size and kerning. And add a little more space between paragraphs/sections of the text (may increase the number of pages). That should help your text and overall printing quality. And last but not least, this is good effort, well thought and well written, and I commend it with all my heart. I hope to see even better things from you. Thank you for this effort.
I'll add a plain-text version for easier reading, and seek to keep up the same with future works. Thank you for the feedback!
(I've added a Printer Friendly plain-text version with larger fonts and a simple black/white color scheme.)